Any Suggestions?

[Porsche]

Okay, this is a copy of an essay I have to write for history. I'm not asking for you guys to do it for me or insult my poor writing style. It isn't due for a few days and I was wondering if an y of you university guys could give me pointers on where I could improve.

BTW, It's on why the use of the Atomic bomb in WW2 was justified militarily. I have strict guideline on what evidence or proof I can use so don't offer me battles or stats I don't already have. It's more about he style and composure.

On August 6, 1945, the United States of America literally shook Japan with a new type of warfare. Their newest weapon, the Atomic bomb, was successfully deployed on the city of Hiroshima, decimating it. The use of this new warfare was necessary and militarily just to win the war. Multiple examples lead to the conclusions that; the Japanese were willing to fight very patriotically to defeat the Americans, potential American and Japanese lives were not lost because of the Atomic bomb and hundreds of allied soldiers were saved because of the bomb being dropped.

To commence, Atomic bomb was necessary because of the determined Japanese, who were very difficult to overcome because of their use of “Kamikaze” Pilots. The kamikazes had been highly successful in attacking the United States Navy. These “suicide squadrons” single goal was fly an aircraft loaded with explosives into enemy targets. It is apparent that during those later years of the war, these “Pilots” had sunk about 40 United States naval vessels. Thus, one can conclude that the use of Atomic warfare was necessary, to prevent any further destruction that may have been caused by the kamikazes. Additionally, the Japanese were difficult to defeat due to
the fact that they had very well trained soldiers. The Japanese infantry were very determined in the invasion of Iwo Jima. They had been bombarded for three months by American forces. They were still firmly planted and had participated in some of the most severe fighting in history after the United States Marines one-month campaign for Iwo Jima drew to and end. This tells us that the use of Atomic warfare was just to end the unnecessary fighting that cost too many Americans their lives.

Secondly, both Allied and Japanese lives would have been lost if it wasn’t for the Atomic bomb. It was estimated by the United States Army that any invasion of Japan would have cost a combined total of 1 million both Allied and Japanese lives. Had this invasion taken place, these lives would have been lost and there is no guarantee of its success. The Army Chief of staff, General George Marshall, also described this invasion. He stated that, “An invasion will still be necessary”. He was proven wrong with war’s outcome due to the successful bombing of both Hiroshima and Nagasaki. This proves that Atomic bomb had to be used to prevent this invasion and increase the chances of success in the United States winning

the war. In addition, the battle of Iwo Jima, which hosted some of the most severe fighting in history, caused the deaths of 6,000 American marines and some 20,000 Japanese soldiers. This battle alone is one of the countless battles that fought by the Allies against Japan. It is battles like this that would have resulted in countless numbers of casualties if the Atomic bomb weren’t dropped when it was.

Most importantly, the use of the Atomic bomb had saved many allied soldiers lives. It cost the Japanese dearly but, prevented allied soldiers from dying in Japanese Prisoner of war camps. These allied soldiers had been discovered at wars’ end suffering from near starvation in 1945. It was a blessing for these soldiers that the Atomic bomb had been used or else hundreds, maybe thousands of soldiers would have died.

Finally, the Atomic bomb, all of its research and it incredible destructive powers were necessary in order to eventually win the war. It was essential in; defeating the determined Japanese Army and Kamikazes, sparing the lives of many soldiers, both Allied and Axis from invasions the would have cost both sides dearly and in saving the lives of many allied prisoners of war. However, one must realize that in order for the justification of the Atomic bomb to be properly understood, they would have to feel the terrifying losses that both sides suffered and the pressure of the position that President Harry S. Truman was forced into. Either save the lives of his American citizens and allies but annihilate a city of hundreds of thousands of innocent Japanese civilians or face months of more gruesome fighting resulting in the near equal losses of his Americans.

I don't think very much of because I'm horrible at essays andI'm only a Grade 10 so don't except anything great. Thanks

[johnny]

When is this due? I'll read it.

[Porsche]

Tuesday May 15th.