Poetry or Writing

[SentraGirl]

Not jibberish at all, I understand completely and I wanted to say thank you to everyone for being so helpful. I have a lot of work to be done on the way I look at life and I guess I should start sooner than later. Well, I had a really long response to this post but it timed out or something so sorry, in short, THANKS

[darkness]

your quite welcome now for my next one.

Never

I have held you in a warm embrace
you and i have shared love unconditional
But now you are being taken from me
A sickness that is deep and within
as final moments come and go
the air in the room is quiet and still
as your last breath draws I still sit
waiting beside for the inevitable moment
when you pass from my love forever
I realise I am now one alone
my love for you keeping me lonely
but now I can never be with another
no I can never love again
Never.

[SentraGirl]

WOW, that was deep!

[darkness]

yeah thats one of the deeper ones.

[grimmy]

damn darkness that one almost brought a tear to my eye
if i still knew how to cry i probably would....
that one just gives me such a mental and overwhelmingly emotional picture in my head...so much with so few words.

sorry again for my tardiness this game is just so cool, they left out some integral cars but makes up for it with game pay and graphics

anyhoo sentra im glad that advice souds like a good idea to you hope you will be able to put it into action. it realy cuts a lot of stress out of your life, makes the travel a bit easier. just ask darkness, sounds like he doesn't let things worry him too much, i suppose that even on opposite sides of the earth great minds will still inevitably come to the same conclusions. (great minds ya like that one darknes, great minds)
ya i also took that one a bit to the extreme and went from "don't worry about things" to "don't let it affect you" that might not sound like a big deal but once that becomes your answer to any situation it takes a certain type of person to accept that kind of life. it essentialy kills all of your emotions, which was alright for me at the time because emotions are weak they cloud your mind and judgement. through the annals of history every mistake that has changed the course of history every bad idea was because of emotions. specificaly anger and love the two worst emotions there are. i have changed since then but still believe these to be true, i just don't adhere to them as adamantly as i did. don't let it affect you, for everything good that happens to you it is as if it were just another occurance for every bad and even tragic thing that happens to you it is just another day nothing new, it takes a special kind of person to accept that way of life.

anyway im rambling
here is one i wrote for a friend of mine named sara
it is about a friend an ex-friend of mine who mentaly and emotionaly abused her.

follow me to paradise
and i will not mislead you
you can place your trust in me
for i shall not mistreat you
gently place your hand in mine
and i will show the way
hold you tight and hold you close
and never let you stray
now i know that you have faith
i'll ask you close your eyes
so you can't see all my deceit
and never know my lies
i've taken you so far away
from where you want to be
with your eyes closed don't know the way
you can't make it without me
dear your eyes i ask you open
now that we are here
i ask you please not to scream
or shed a single tear
for this is my own little world
i built it out of hate
in the darkness and the sorrow
with you my captive mate
i need not bind your soul to mine
i know you'll never leave
it is much too scary on your own


but not half as much as me

[SentraGirl]

Damn, that was awesome, first of all, but the saddest part is I completely understand it and I can relate to it so easily. I wish I could go to my own little world even if it is full of darkness, better than pain.

[speediva]

I don't know how I ever missed this before...

I suck at writing, and I know it, but it won't keep me from doing so every random now-and-again. I find that the only time I can write something that is remotely worthy is when I'm alone and scared. I wrote in my journal only at 2 periods in my life: When I was in Germany and when I lived in Kansas City with my aunt and uncle. The most poetry I ever wrote was from KC. I guess I'll share one of them now. I'm in the mood for reading and writing poetry today.

Speak
Needs unmet
I turn away
From myself
Another day.

Suffer silent;
Speak not a word.
Keep it in;
Remain unheard.

Hide in darkness.
Keep them at bay.
I couldn't speak;
What would I say?

[SentraGirl]

Saturn, that was awesome! It was really touching and I can definitely relate.

[darkness]

grimmy and Saturn, I really liked both your poems.

all these poems we are putting here kinf of give you a hint into why I picked Darkness as a name so long ago. I can hide behind it.

anyway for the next.

Rain

Drip goes the water
I look out my window and see it pour
I love the rain
it describes me
The rain is like my mind
Rage, fear, intensity, and then the rainbow
I see it, I understand it
I love it because it is me
Symbolic yet true
Ugly yet beautiful
hard yet tender
the rain is like a person in thought
It's like the coldness of a persons heart
yet soothing and appealing
I can't look away
my imagination grow deep
rain forever i want
it's the coldness, the feeling, the intense reaction
the comfort, the beauty, the truth
Rain signifies life
rain is life
I love the rain.

[CellarDoor]

Heaven and hell I worship you so well
Inspired by weakness I follow in sickness
unsuspecting confusion
I am a prisoner of dillusion and fanatical hope
Bless my expectation in this unforgiving creation.

[CellarDoor]

The cars on the road are color coded according to the level of my fear.
Very strange, but true.
Been out of the circuit so long,
I'm not sure what you all are driving anymore.
Keeps me on my toes,
this unfortunate mistrust of the entire rainbow,
when all I wanna do
is stop dancing,
tear off my pink ballet slippers
and burn them;
stop this frantic sidestepping jig
of dodging bullets
ricocheting off this dusty trail,
and trade in my cowgirl boots
for combat boots.
Even a white knight on his steed brings no comfort.
In my world of opposites, white spells fear;
well meaning white cars
map out the most direct route
to my downfall.
Green cars can't be trusted, either.
with less than loving intent.
Brown El Caminos and
beaten blue minivans
somehow hold the scepter of judgment.
I feel safer with bright, blazing red,
cause I can see them coming
at a distance;
like sunrise,or apocalpyse
(depending on the driver).
If I were queen
you'd all be tooling around in go-karts;
approaching slowly,weatherbeaten
in the harsh elements of my inspection
as I am in yours.
I'd keep you in my sights, your faces magnified
and centered in my crosshairs,just in case.
My dream car?
A lovebus, painted black,
with monster truck tires.
Then you'd see me coming.
I'd be driving out loud.
Or a black sedan,
nondescript,
with tinted windows and black velvet interior.
Anything dark, like my lover's fascination.
Anything dark,
and soft as the yawning void
of my lover's compassion;
black as the darkest hour
between midnight and dawn.
I'd crawl inside and hide.

[SentraGirl]

Wow Cellar, I liked that, it was very deep and I could relate really well when you put just "tear off my pink ballet slippers and burn them". I've definitely felt that way before. Anyways, I liked it a lot, you're very talented

[CellarDoor]

Originally posted by SentraGirl
Wow Cellar, I liked that, it was very deep and I could relate really well when you put just "tear off my pink ballet slippers and burn them". I've definitely felt that way before. Anyways, I liked it a lot, you're very talented

:flash: Thank you Sentra Girl, I'm glad you liked it. I didn't write this particular one, but I agree the person who did is talented.

[tonioseven]

You guys and gals are awesome!!! I haven't written in about 9 years. I used to enjoy it a lot.:grey:

[2strokebloke]

A freinds Haiku:

A man eats his car
it is quite un-sandwich-like
he feels very smart

(though personally I enjoy Waka more)