[speediva]

That's really awesome!

And I truly hate to do this, as I'm going to look like a beeotch... but there's something about the last line of the first stanza that doesn't seem to flow for me. Then again, I've never been very good at serious poetry. I'm more of a Robert Frost kind of cynic. I only write this to be honest, and leave it to show for my lacking poetic proficiency.

But I truly like everything else about it. The images really formed from the words. Very cool!