how about we all stop arguing over who knows more about poetry. His poem was heartfelt. He never claimed to be the next shakespeare. He just wanted to know if it could be classified as poetry. Yes it can. It may not be shakespeareian poetry, but who cares. I think it was a good poem. You are allowed to skip from topic to topic if you want. If you dont understand the jist of it then you must be stupid. The point is that every line conveys a feeling about her. It doesnt have to connect like a plot. It's a point.
heres a poem I wrote for an ex.
Quote:
Leilani Kauhola
To Leilani with all my love.
When I look into her eyes,
The ocean becomes shallow.
I drown in the depths of her mind,
Her beauty holds me captive.
She does not see why
My eyes are for her only.
She asks what I see in her but
Words cannot half explain it.
I see love.
I see warmth, she captures my eyes and
I become her prisoner.
Feeling her love with my eyes.
Feeling complete satisfaction with
Looking at her.
Years pass with each second, but they
Still are too short.
With our hands we connect, transforming
Into one living being.
And all I can hope for is that she feels the
Same pleasure as I, if only for a moment.
Richard Nelson Murta Jr.
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