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Old 09-17-2004, 05:10 AM   #12
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Re: Re: another attempt at song-writing... critiques please?

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Originally Posted by ec437
2nd verse:

Never could tell what you wanted with my abide
The world seems so dark when you see it through my blind eyes
I wished and I wanted I always believed in you
It was foolish of me to place all of my trust in you

first part of revised chorus... still working on it:

Oh, I wish that tomorrow would come
and take all of our fears away


Wow, that 2nd verse is just as good as the 1st!!

Nice job bro, I love it!

I play guitar

I'm not tops on lyrics, but I can post some of my own set (has music) if you want!
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