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Old 09-16-2004, 03:53 AM   #1
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another attempt at song-writing... critiques please?

And everywhere that I look I feel you there with me
haunting me stalking me preying so mightily
everytime does keep your presence still lingering
real in my mind though my soul keeps deceiving me

oh, how I wish for tomorrow
tomorrow is another day
how I wish the past behind us
would forever go away
how I wish for tomorrow
tomorrow is another day
and I wish the past behind us
the past is forever gone

not completely finished... better than my last crappy song, as this one actually has an instrument part to it already! Don't know what I'm talking about in the lyrics, (no really, I have no idea... must be some sort of subconcious thing) I just started typing and thinking of rhymes and there you have it.

PS, the song comes across as metallica-ish to me. just so you know kind of what it sounds like.
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