Poetry or Writing

Well I'm going to ask this now. I know Terminal Velocity has, and I will admit now I have done this quite a bit.

But has anyone here or does anyone write poetry or any sort of creative writing. I have a small collection of poems I have written. I usually don't admit it, under a handful of people have seen them at all.

I'm not sure why I want to post them but I'm in a sharing mood. I'm just a bit worried that they'll be stolen and used somewhere else.

Anyway maybe a mod can make this sticky and we can all share our stuff (or whoever wants to).

And to all the immature people who think this is wussy or what ever
BITE ME !!:flipa:

I'll post my first one in a sec.

Well heres my first one. This is actually kinda scary waiting to find out what people think. But whats life if you don't take chances.

It's a nice little one to start.

Wonder

I see her everyday
We share a class in school
I can never take my eyes off her
Her beauty is more than any I've seen
We do talk about many things
She doesn't realise how much I like her
I don't know if she has a boyfriend
I'm only hoping she does not
I wish I could ask her out
But no I cannot speak a word
It may destroy us as friends
So I am left wondering
Does she like me?
Will she go out with me?
I can only sit and wonder.

:o

It's 20 years or more since I was there,but I remember those emotions very vividly.

and I am currently working on a novel,using technical information and emotions that I have gathered in my travels.:D

No poetry from me. I dont like it much at all. Since I am writing specifications, code and sql all day, I dont spend time doing any short stories either. Although I do like those.

Originally posted by darkness

Anyway maybe a mod can make this sticky and we can all share our stuff (or whoever wants to).




A good idea!

Consider it stuck

Cheers

Though if no one else posts it may be better to let it die off.

I'd like to hear more, Darkness. I really like "Wonder." Oh, how often I've felt that way. I do a lot of drawing. (I'm launching a website this weekend with my art). But I have no gift for eloquent speech. :-P

I guess I can pull out some more then.

I don't think I have a knack for eloquent speech. Hell i probably couldn't even manage to say stuff out loud. I just found I could put it on paper.
Anyway most of it is soppy stuff, but then again it's what I was going through at the time. I haven't actually written one in a while.

Heres another one. I decided to pull out one a little different than most I've written.

A Drifters Mind

From one place to another
I travel into the sunset
Going where my feelings take me
I do not have a home
For I do not know where I belong
Something calls to me
But I do not know where
For I am a drifter
I travel the path alone
My only companion the wind
I keep on moving
Searching for a part of me
To fill the hole inside
Will that end my journey
I have yet to know
But now I must continue
I've been here for too long
And now I must head back.

Nice!

I like that last one, very meaningfull.

silence be sheltering
fallen in peace
yet sound nonexistent
remains in the crease
of times long past
and legacies great
all in the distance
in line they must wait
however whenever
sooner not quite
emerging from the shadows
to hide in the light
is one unspoken
to horrible to hide
from our own actions
he doth slither and slide
underlying the terror
good shall be sought
to undo the horrors
this one has wrought
within nothingness
and existence undone
nothingness surrounding
lives this one

that was pretty cool grimmy.:)

My next one:

Step inside my mind

Come into my window
The passage into my mind
Come and read my thoughts
See what you can find
A way to understand me
No one really knows
The way I envision life
My fantasy and my woes
Can you handle my perception
Can you acknowledge my pain
The picture through my eyes
An eternal bliss of rain
Depression is not the word
Sad I am not
My own lifes perspective
Is what I've really got
So try to comprehend my thoughts
Walk through the sacred light
If you see my inner notions
Understand me you just might.

wow darkness that was a good one
here is another one for you


the words that dance
across my lips
while lying here in bed
the story of you
that my heart sings
deep within my head
and if i were
to say im sorry
would it be to late
or if instead
i said lets go
would you hesitate
and if some how
you found out
that i would take my life
you'd comfort me
and hold me close
and slowly guide my knife
so sing a song
of lonliness
i'll never know your name
and if i told you everything
would we be the same

wow I like that one.

I'll post somemore when I get home.

Well since this is a car forum, heres one I put together about racing.
It sounds a bit silly reading it now.

The Racers Story

They arrive
in all their readiness
with iron clad stallions
Pieces and parts
come together in turn
making the whole of the beast
It's body finely tuned
It's heart burning with power
A lone figure steps out
donning armour softer than steel
His personal helm
the only expression shown
he apporaches his steed
knowing it is trustworthy
the two become one
a biomechanical form
the battelfield awaits
admitting only those worthy
those capable of the challenge
the competitors a group
but with only a single spotlight
fame for only one
can he find the skill
the sought ability of
flying on the ground
is the courage there
can he ride the edge
the fine line between
control and chaos
as he does
the challengers recede
adrenalin flowing like water
he launches to the end
past the line of black and white
he has beaten the challenge
the track is his
claimed by right of passage
Now to bask in the glory
to savour it for the moment
until the time is upon them
to accept the challenge again.

i don't think that was silly at all
im going to hold off on posting for a day or two lest we expend our repertoire within the first few weeks. so if anyone else is going to post please feel free to do so

yeah I don't want to run out of stuff to write. I haven't written any in a while, so I've got a limited supply.

here is the only thing i ever wrote that didn't rhyme
kinda short but to the point


she just stood there oblivious
leaning over her friends desk
she knew not my love for her

she carried on a conversation
she smiled briefly
the same as it was before

I like that one.

Most of mine don't ryhme, I find they sound better not ryhming.
I post a new one at lunch.

when is lunch for you... i mean what time is it there?

hehe sorry. it's past lunch now, I got a bit busy, it's 3pm here now.

well heres the next one. It came about from my 'handle' darkness. which i had lonfg before I joined AF. and it's why I use the name darkness as my own now.

Darkness

It is quiet and cold
an emptiness neverending
it envelopes and possesses
no emotions or feeling
it is missing something
something that is always different
but it is kept hidden
away from others knowledge
to feel this in the heart is worst
to know there is no love
to know there is no hope
to never feel these
to be alone for life
but can it change
can light dissolve the darkness
no there will never be a change
no warmth can dissolve a frozen heart
there is only one solution
to succumb to the blackness
to let it's power overtake you
to let it take the pain
as it covers and hides you
you withdraw into the shadows
comforted by the loneliness it brings
you dissappear quickly and silently
never to be seen
never to be missed
becoming one with the Darkness.

anxiety building
intense emotions
waiting patiently
for undying devotions
calming and cooling
as the clock ticks on
apathy invited
it quickly clicks on
he sees her face
she brushes her hair
a love untold
he thinks he must bear
his attention undivided
upon her is given
quickly to love
his heart is driven
unbeknownst to him
she's excited he's there
she turns her attention
pretends not to care
they know eachother not
just a face with a name
their mutual love
is a fire without flame

nice one man.

folow me you worthless sinner
I will surely make you ill
I will leave you empty bitter
I will make you want to kill

you can't see I've no emotions
I hide from you my blackened soul
drag you through my fiery oceans
I have you all under control

I'll corupt your way of thinking
all thats yours I'll take as mine
you can't see you're slowly sinking
you thought you were so divine

it's time for me to make my rounds
and collect what I must obtain
nothing like the angered sounds
of agony and eternal pain

wow I really like that one. It so fits with Darkness.

Fall

I need to tell you something about myself
before our realtionship
can go any further
I'm the kind of person
who feels very deeply
And when I give my heart
I give it completely
I've never learned how to love
"just a little"
So as you can guess
I've been hurt more than once
However I feel something
strange and wonderful
between us
as if in this brief time
I can already trust you
whole-heartedly
and that's why
one simple question
If I fall for you will you catch you.

i thought you might like that one
good to know you do


i liked "fall" look at the last line
if i fall for you will you catch you
is that suposed to be will you catch me
or does that have a deeper meaning along the lines of is she strong enough to be able to handle your love?
anywho i think you are slowly changing my mind about not enjoying nonrhyming poetry
and for that i thank you

well it's friday and i don't feel like waiting to post another so....

sing a song of summers past
and fallow moons of yore
tell me all your wicked deeds
and whom you did them for

but do you even know his name
for whom you told those lies
and do you know eternal shame
to stare into his eyes

and you so pure on the outside
so cheating underhanded
just hide it away deep in your mind
there's nothing to be reprimanded

angels you thought sang you to sleep
on all of those restless nights
were demons crouched down on their knees
giving you all of their fright

but shallow though i know i am
i will never do his deeds
for i know i am my own man
not a servant on his knees

now write a song of sorrows grace
and wash it in your tears
a song so true your heart will ache
as it wallows in your fears

so sing a song of summers past
and fallow moons of yore
look down at your blood stained hands
and your soul dying on the floor

whoops yeah it was supposed to be if I fall for you will you catch me.

but I like your reasoning for what I put down.

Wow, those are awesome poems. I love poetry and you guys are great writers, you should try and get some of them published and get some money. I have poems but I'm only 19 so I'm young and I still suck at writing. I'm gonna look for one though. Anyways, I really enjoyed them.

Don't worry Sentra I doubt yours suck. I don't think mine are anything special. and many of them I wrote when I was 19-21 yrs old.

On the contrary Darkness, I really liked your poetry. I still haven't found my book but I'm looking:) Thank you for the support, by the way.

He walks a midst the stars of night,
He beams a bright celestial light.
To set my lonely heart of lame,
At just a mention of his name.
And helplessly, I float away,
I'm swept along confusion bay.
I'm drifting past the shore of chance,
Where happy hearts together dance.
A whirlpool of forbidden thoughts,
Where love's strong current has me caught.
I smash upon the rocks of doubt,
Defenselss, I am tossed about.
I'm trapped within a sea of tears,
I'm rocked by violent waves of fears.
My boat is broken by the tide,
My longing passions all subside.
I'm emptied into a pool of calm,
To watch the water sweep my qualms.
Away in the depths of loss,
And with despair, they twist and toss.
And on the bank, in Angel's light,
His smile illuminates the night.

God, I haven't written in forever and wasn't any good to begin with, but here's the first two I ever wrote...


--drink--
the mind flows.
the clouds break.
this drunken haze is always a creative state.
The hunger deepens, unsatisfied
as I try once more to turn the tide.
And the mind flies high as my body spins down
unchained this way and totally unbound.
Then she comes again, her sweetness on my tongue
while I pause for a moment, the torture undone.
And slowly, too slowly, she finds her way down
with the warmth of her kiss I can feel all around.
Lovely is she, and with such simple purity I love her.
I love her, but how can that be?
As I ponder this question, there comes a realization
she has never been the object of my infatuation.
And then, just then, when my answer finally comes,
the mind flies high and my hunger slowly dies.


--alone--
That empty feeling grows again
and threatens to tear away her mind.
So she tries to escape just one more day,
but its only a matter of time.
Yet these fearful thoughts are too familiar
to take her by surprise,
soft and sweet and simple she may be,
but with this she’s all to wise.
And her dreams would come so blessedly
at a hopeless time like this.
With the warmth that dances through her head
of life in eternal bliss.
And here is why she struggles on,
yet always seems to miss
all she’s really looking for
is one true heartfelt kiss.

OK Sentra as I said don't ever doubt yours aren't very good. I really liked that one.

and Texan I liked yours as well. and welcome to the poetry thread.

heres a nice quick one

Waiting Behind
One day I found you were sad
I heard I was the reason
But today I'll see you glad
for right now is your season
And if you should need a hand
or a friend to treat you kind
Turn around from where you stand
I shall be waiting behind.

I really liked those Texan:flash:

Life, ... what does it truly mean?
Does it mean love and happiness,
Or defeat and sadness?
Does it involve loving or hating,
Stating or debating?
What does this word nobody knows the meaning of mean?
Is it made of good times or bad?
When are you joyful,
When are you sad?
What are you judged by?
When are you accepted or ignored?
Who determines your popularity,
Who determines your prosperity?
What determines how much your loved or hated?
Is it you ... or is it them?
So many questions, so little time.
So many thoughts and feelings, yet no one wants to share.
So ... you tell me the true meaning of life.
You tell me how you have a good one or a bad?
Or really, can these questions be answered?
It's all up to you, ... so you, you tell me!

Well thanks for the compliments, it's been awhile since anyone has read these. Pretty much everything in this thread is good stuff. Two more...

--perfect--
Sweetness falls from the innocence that held her tight
and everything I know says let her go
but that’s never gonna feel quite right
Because no matter what I say, no matter how I fight,
We both know I can’t stand to be alone tonight.
So she strides away so confidently
not realizing it’s me she can’t see
she’s fallen out of my heart
-she’s history-
but does she have any idea what she’s done to me?


--taken--
I was the throbbing, fleeting, vitality of youth
till mortalities well ran dry.
I devoured the tastes and smells of life
cause I knew strong souls still die.
Yet when the vast entangled world
left me cold and still,
I never thought to say goodbye
to the gifts it had revealed.

Love

Love, what a complicated belief.
Some have grief, while others express relief.
Love is something not many can explain,
It sometimes drive many people completely insane.
People are either loved or hated,
Accepted or denied
People with depression, usually don't know why.
Do you know the answer?
Can you answer why so many live and healthy people commit suicide?
Is it because of them or the people they meet?
Can someone really answer all these questions of why?
Is there a real answer, or just a bunch of excuses and lies?
Now take this into consideration, and think is there an answer?
Sorry to leave you hanging, but this is how the poem ends.
Just like many people's lives remain unfilled and incomplete in the very end.


Prom Night

Love me tender
Love me sweet
Love me all night
Sweep me off my feet

The Rage

He is very quiet
keeps his emotions to himself
nothing seems to affect him
Always calm and happy
but this is only a cover
nobody know the struggle
that rages on inside
everything is bottled up
his anger and frustration
his sadness and his pain
it grows and builds
only his will keeps it in check
he cannot allow himself to break
to do so would cause chaos
an unconfined fury
but he can never release it
it would drive him insane
his sould becoming empty
a dark void dead of emotion
he longs to care
hopes to once feel love
but the hope is draining
leaving him alone
in a cloud of despair
he does not know where to turn
must he face this alone
standing only with his will
becoming as hard as steel
and just as cold
as the rage roars on
tearing him asunder
from the inside out.

hello again darkness hows it going buddy?
sorry I haven't posted for a few days... I just bought gt3 so i've been a little preoccupied

i would like to thank you sentragirl and texan for posting your creations here. now the thread feels alive, not just darkness and i writing for eachother... as it were

sentragirl most of my poems were written when i was 18 and 19 so don't think you are any less of a poet due to lack of experience for truly it is the begining of this craft when you have the most creativity. you will look back one day and amaze yourself with the things you have written. granted i have looked back and seen a lot of crap among my poems but there were also some realy good ones whose style i can no longer return to.

i realy reay liked feelings
and texan your poem taken knocked me for a loop it was amazing

so here is my next one
it is a song i've been working on

commets coming
people running
sing a song and say goodbye

crimsons churning
yellows burning
watch the sun melt thru the sky

wholy praying
buildings swaying
flashing lights they burn my eye

horses flying
'ternaly trying
just lay down and dont be shy

the end is near but dont be scared
'cause lives aren't lost when lives are shared
with judgement gone and sense impared
so many lost and no one cared

fissures flaming
stones a raining
up and down the earth will die

fires raging
deathset staging
how'd we make the mountains cry

confusion storming
anarchy forming
what could cause such sad dismay

elements clashing
forces smashing
midnight hour burns bright as day

the end is near but don't be scared
'cause lives aren't lost when lives are shared
with judgement gone and sense impared
so many lost and no one cared
no one cared
no one cared

Absolutely awesome song Grimmy. I really liked it a lot and thank you for the encouragement, the only thing is I only seem to create when I am sad.

same here Sentra. most of mine have been written when I was sad.

It was just a party of my life that I went through, I still there a little, but it's gotten a lot better.

oh and I liked that one grimmy.:)

have you learned how to make yourself sad yet?

I don't have to learn how to make myself sad, it seems to be a natural thing for me lately. It's hard going from teenager to adult:(

Originally posted by SentraGirl
I don't have to learn how to make myself sad, it seems to be a natural thing for me lately. It's hard going from teenager to adult:(

It can be, but theres always people who have been there before and are willing to lend you a hand.:)

Things will settle into place. I wouldn't say i'm completely happy about the way things are at the moment but I'm feeling good about things. It's all about outlook.

Thank you Darkness, it just feels like a very lonely place=(

Originally posted by SentraGirl
Thank you Darkness, it just feels like a very lonely place=(

I know, I've been there. I guess the best thing is to find something that doesn't feel lonely and do that more.

I used to mope around quite a bit feeling sorry for myself because I was lonely. I just kept myself busy doing things I like, and just kept telling myself I was happy and I was good. It was a big help.

yeah, I have been trying to keep busy and I got involved in the gym, and softball and stuff but I messed up my knee and needed surgery so now I can't do pretty much anything. I find writing to be a big help and while with my boyfriend, nothing can go wrong=)

exactly, there you go:)

My next one

Beside Me

I lie awake watching you close
you are there lying next to me
there you look so sweet and innocent
your arms around me in a tight embrace
it takes all my strength not to touch you
for that would wake you from your quiet slumber
the curves of your body enticing me
making me think of the ways we make love
you slowly woke and asked "whats wrong?"
you voice was sweet and warmed my heart
i drew you closeas you slowly rose
you soft lips queitly slipped to mine
the kiss you gave was warm and soothing
the worriness over you now gone
the love we shared everlasting
I crawl under the covers as do you
the love now to be shared in our dreams
my happiness with you here unmeasurable
the only wish, to have you beside me
beside me forever.

That one was awesome! I think my favorite of the ones I've read.

When love as strong as mine occurs
It's sad how people suffer
One gives love, one does not
What's to be said about the one who gives up
Love is pure, love is precious
Love is different
That's for sure
I love my dog but that's not amore
I love my friend different than my mom
I love my boyfriend more than I ever thought
I love life and I love flowers
But love is love and that's all that matters


I don't like this one but thought I'd post it anyways

Originally posted by SentraGirl
That one was awesome! I think my favorite of the ones I've read.

thanks it's one of my faves. I liked your one too it was nice a simple.

Originally posted by darkness


thanks it's one of my faves. I liked your one too it was nice a simple.

Thanks!

hello again!!!

sentra i kinda know how you feel i am 22 right now and just getting my act together and starting college in december where as all my old friends from highschool have already graduated and started a life for themselves boy do i miss some of them... never going to see them again
now most everything in my life i have been able to shrug off jst say fuck it or it happens sometimes but there used to be this little shop called the wizards tower. it sold a card game called magic the gathering you may or may not have heard of it anyways i based my life around this game for almost five years. the walls in my room were covered in rare cards, box tops, magazine pictures, and various other related items. i had every book they ever printed i would order two boxes of booster packs every time a new series came out (3 times a year) so i could try to obtain a complete collection, which never happened i would always have to buy more packs then eventualy the singles themselves. and when i wasn't in school i was at the tower playing magic or reading this huge book on every ruling ever made in a tournament so that i could eventualy become a sanctioned judge. but one day i went there and the doors were locked. mike, the owner and his wife melissa never said anything about beeing short on rent to any of us god knows we would have done what we could to keep it going, but that was it in the blink of an eye my world had been turned upside down my defining point was gone forever. now that might sound kinda silly being that attached to just a little store but like i said i based my life around the game and then when the store opened for their short lived run it just heightened that feeling even more. i still look back some times and wonder what had happened to all the friends i made there what they are doing how their lives are going and just sigh and say to myself you can't look back when you are trying to move forward or you might run into a tree

anyway here is another one without a name

too bright for mine eyes
for in shadow i dwell
too afraid to look
for i might see hell
the world around me
is breaking at the seams
it can't stay together
it hasn't the means
chaos and confusion
the world falling apart
i can't stand to watch it
i haven't the heart

Wow, thanks for the insight. I feel as if everything is falling apart. I understand what you're saying and I'm sorry that had to happen to you but it probably was for the greater good. Good luck with school now! Great poem by the way, short and to the point, awesome.

the greatest piece of advice that i can give you is simply patience. patience is truly the greatest of all virtues. in time it can heal broken hearts mend wounds and piece together all of the fallen parts of the confusion you may be going through. i have, unfortunately begun to believe in patience a little too much as i rarely work for the things i really want anymore because i have come to believe that if i wait long enough anything i have ever wanted will eventualy make its way to me. i still believe this to be true just not very expediant.

another bit of advice is to stop worrying about anything. what has happened cannot be changed, what is going to happen will indefinetly happen, no amount of worrying will ever change this, it will only waste your energy and cause a situation to be worse than it has to be. things happen for a reason to try to change these occurances is not only imposible but foolish, so just let them happen as they do and consider yourself a better, wiser person for having been able to deal with them as they come.

This is absolutely amazing advice and I can't tell you how appreciative I am to receive it. I worry so much and I get so stressed out and then I still get disappointed! It's so frustrating. I don't believe the same as you do about not having to work for what will happen but I believe in having patience while you try to accomplish your goals which is something I definitely don't have. Anyways, thanks sooooo much for the advice.

Wow I wish I'd got here sooner.

All I can say is Grimmy is right on the money. I'm 24 and 2 years out of University. so I've been through that part of life and it so far has been the most confusing of all. but that's ok.

I am originally from NZ, but I spent 10 years living in the US. from 9 to 19. So I did the US high school thing, I know what it's like. then when I graduated I moved back to NZ to start University. So I completely started over. No friends of my own, just my parents friends. Looking back on it I think I did the best I could. Now I have lots of friends and much of my life is sorted. There are parts that still trouble me but I'm working on those. basically I'm still trying to completely find myself, as in who I am.

But as grimmy said. patience is a key. Though I can get frustrated and angry, I don't often show it, and try to be patient.

I'm a big believer in fate. if it happens it was meant to, so the best thing is to find a way to deal with it. don't let bad things stress you out, just look at it as a challenge and move past it. And look at the past as just that, history, history can't be changed. there are parts of mine I'd love to erase but I look at it as I wasn't as mature then, i didn't know but I do now.

anyway, i think this makes sense. my mind has a tendency to work at a million miles an hour, and just come out as jibberish.