my half written song

I found this half finished song that I wrote a while ago. Does it suck?

All my secrets bound in this little bottle
held afloat in an ocean so deep
you know that i'd swim that very ocean
any and all for you adoration

come and meet with me in our dreams tonight
come and run with me with me tonight
an endearing term for life so dear
an endearing term I'll say I love you



also, is it odd that I sleep with music on? It seems like no one else that I know does this....

sometimes i think it'd be nice to sleep with some classical music on. it'd be real relaxing and nice.

That song is a little corny. You need to listen to some Glassjaw for love advice. :thumbsup:

lyrics are 75% of a song in my opinion. i need to hear the total sound to give my :2cents:

cheesy...
any music to it?
I'm hearing emo/punk/acoustic music, am I close?

I found this half finished song that I wrote a while ago. Does it suck?

All my secrets bound in this little bottle
held afloat in an ocean so deep
you know that i'd swim that very ocean
any and all for you adoration

come and meet with me in our dreams tonight
come and run with me with me tonight
an endearing term for life so dear
an endearing term I'll say I love you



also, is it odd that I sleep with music on? It seems like no one else that I know does this....

i sleep with my music on. cant really sleep with out noise. for some reason message in a bottle by sting

Well I have the same situation actually :lol: Here's my song:

never thought i could feel like this
like the universe just fell into place
you breathe in
i breathe out
you breathe out
i breathe in
every part of you
perfection
is how we lay here
your leg over mine
head on my shoulder
hand on my chest
i'd die to lose myself
inside you kiss
again


Yeah I know it sucks but hey...

i have to sleep with a REALLY LOUD fan on. it sucks in the winter because i freeze

i have to sleep with a REALLY LOUD fan on. it sucks in the winter because i freeze


Me to, i like to have my ceiling fan going full blast. And during the winter i throw a few extra blankets on.

The music i listen to while i sleep is a little different. I like to listen to the House of a thousand corpses theme song while i sleep. That or lucky boys confusion.

Well I have the same situation actually :lol: Here's my song:

never thought i could feel like this
like the universe just fell into place
you breathe in
i breathe out
you breathe out
i breathe in
every part of you
perfection
is how we lay here
your leg over mine
head on my shoulder
hand on my chest
i'd die to lose myself
inside you kiss
again


Yeah I know it sucks but hey...


IMO...i like those lyrics.

Here is a full written song... Performed by our band...

Whats going on tonight?
Congregation, of the light,
It's time to brain wash our peers (x3)

You are the rightous one, but we just saw your naked...

Drunken fucking, mouthful from sucking,
Did you want to preech something?
Then tell me nothing!

Fuck your random loving,
Fuck your mascarades
Your nothing but a toy,
Wallowing in your own charades

O, you spread your arms to the Lord,
Then spread your legs like a whore,

Leave me,
Out of your circle,
Out of your life,
Out of your group,

I care nothing of your sinful behavior,

Drilled into the ground,
Your 'cross' hasnt any meaning to you,

Wear him around your neck, hold him on high, raise your arms in 'faith', and your off to get layed.

I am Straight-Edge (x3)
Forever Fucking Straight-Edge
I am Straight-Edge (x3)

(Girl Speaking)
"... Your leading a life of sin... That music doesnt glorify God, you have to *Gun shot*"
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We have this thing called "Young Life" in our Mother Land... It basically is a cover for kids who are into drugs, drinking, and random sexual encounters. So they can say they're rightous, and holy... Then later that week, drunk off their ass, and knocked up.

That song is a vent on that subject... I'll post our recording if I ever get it online...

-Wes

im not much of a poet

Well I have the same situation actually :lol: Here's my song:

never thought i could feel like this
like the universe just fell into place
you breathe in
i breathe out
you breathe out
i breathe in
every part of you
perfection
is how we lay here
your leg over mine
head on my shoulder
hand on my chest
i'd die to lose myself
inside you kiss
again


Yeah I know it sucks but hey...

sounds kind of like something Enrique Iglesias would sing....But the lyrics make sense.

SAMHAINS LYRICS

those are some pretty bad ass lyrics, too bad cant hear them played and what not.

Thanks dude... You should hear the rest of our stuff...

Anyways, we have a CD coming out soon, I'll hit ya' up on AIM and I'll send you a copy.

-Wes

haha, I guess I write better instrumentals than I do lyrics. I'll try to get some posted sometime.

Thanks dude... You should hear the rest of our stuff...

Anyways, we have a CD coming out soon, I'll hit ya' up on AIM and I'll send you a copy.

-Wes

badass man, ill be lookin forward to it

these are some pretty good lyrics guys.
if you have any more it would be nice to put them in the poetry and writing sticky in philosophising. there is quite a bit of good stuff in there that you might want to check out.