My First ever Cell Shade

Sorry if this is in the wrong are guys, but yeh this is my first every outlining/cell shading thing, im not really looking for you guys to say good job and stuff, just offer some tips, and some critiscism.

(also, feel free to color it in, since i suck at shading, and stuff.)

http://members.lycos.co.uk/freexxxpasses/tooning.jpg

i reckon that would make a good shading template for beginners.

Yeah it would, wouldn't it?